User:Violetlopaze6/The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series)/Aileen216 Peer Review

'''First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?'''

I think that the article does a good job on citing a lot of sources in their bibliography. I think that they clearly conveyed the point of what they were trying to get across with this addition to the prexisting artticle. I especially liked this line, "Laurel and Susanna's friendship also counteracts the idea in society that women must focus solely on being mothers and caring for others. In the series, both women are able to care for their children and have their own personal lives" I thought it was direct and well stated.

'''What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?'''

I think this was only included because it was in the sandbox draft but I would make sure to remove the part about what you intend to focus on. I think it doesn't go with the informative style of wikipedia. I would also continue to beef up the section that is being added just to have a few more examples of the topic.

What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?

I think just continuing to add examples to bulk up the article is the most important thing to do. I thought this was a super good start and if more sources and examples are added then it will feel more complete.

'''Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!'''

I will definietly add more sources to my article after reading this one. I thought that they had an extensive list of sources that seemed reputable to what they were writing about. I think that implementing a similar style in my own article would be extremely beneficial.