User:Violetlopaze6/The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series)/Jessicashoey Peer Review

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Violetlopaze6
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Violetlopaze6/The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series)

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The article gets straight to the point of the section this group is adding to the main article. The flow of the section was really smooth and it went over a very complex trope and converted it to simpler, more general, terms, which was impressive. I think that this is beneficial for the audience as it gets the point across efficiently without confusing them. I would suggest maybe a few specific examples in the show that displays these ideas you’re pointing at. For example, one specific point where I wished there was an example from the show is when the authors talk about these lives that the mothers are living and how this shows their complexity and depth. I can think of a few general scenes of the two characters talking to each other throughout the season that shows their interesting relationship and characterization that might be beneficial for the audience to recognize. Another suggestion is to maybe add sub-headings? I’m not sure how this would look as there isn’t a ton of meat to the section quantity wise, however, it might be beneficial to keep the section organized and easier to read through. Overall, I honestly think the section is beautifully written and it’s very informative and important for people to know before/prior to watching the show. ~