User:Violetlopaze6/The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series)/Jhoffgw Peer Review

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General info
Violetlopaze6
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Violetlopaze6/The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):User:Violetlopaze6/The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - I would suggest a broader first paragraph before going into specifics on the concept of "female friendships". perhaps talk about the show as a whole.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? -Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? - Yes, in fact it seems overwhelmingly from 2023.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? - "In contrast to much of the entertainment industry, The Summer I Turned Pretty does not focus on only the relationships of the characters’ kids or only on the relationships of the parent characters." In what mainstream shows does this occur? perhaps provide an example.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? -It adds to the feminist parts of the show as a whole.

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral? -Yes. It makes sure to not generalize THE ENTIRE tv industry.

Sources and References


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? -I would say there is too much repetition of a single source.

Organization
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) - Try to find more academic articles. This can include JSTOR for example.


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes, but sometimes it does not flow very well.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? I don't think so, but make sure to run it through Grammarly to be safe!


 * Is the content added well-organized -Overall, I feel like each section is a little short and could be juiced up a little.

Overall impressions


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article -Not certain but I feel that adding juice to the section overall could help make the article more equitable.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? I liked putting in one of its critical acclamations into the article because I feel it deserves to be mentioned.

Additional Questions


 * Does your peer have 5-7 reliable sources? No, you only have a few. Make sure to keep collecting!
 * Does the topic link in some way to our course material? Yes, it directly relates to feminism
 * Does your peer add historical context to their article? Yes, it mentions how other shows typically fail with this concept.