User:Violetlopaze6/The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series)/Ruthy Flint Peer Review

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(Violet Lopaze's Group)
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 * User:Violetlopaze6/The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series) :
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 * The Summer I Turned Pretty (TV series):

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Violet's group did a really good job at explaining how The Summer I Turned Pretty TV show does a really good hob with female relationships. They explained clearly that the show balances both the teenage and the adult relationships equally, and provided a clear explanation of how that is special. I specifically liked the phrase "In contrast to much of the entertainment industry, The Summer I Turned Pretty does not focus on only the relationships of the characters’ kids or only on the relationships of the parent characters. Rather, this television series depicts each respective relationship and how they interact with each other." I think these sentences were very well written, and clearly explains the problems with other shows in contrast to TSITP. Something that could be added would be the linking of other wikipedia articles in this section, just as a quick way for readers to get more information. This was if people want to reference the original Wiki article or other sources in it, they can just click on a quick link. I also would suggest that the group possibly add some examples from the show, to give readers an understanding of the close female relationship. I think it is most important that the group adds in a specific example from the show highlighting how special the female friendship was, so that readers can get a clear understanding of what was displayed in the TV series. I also think adding a photo or two from the TV show could be helpful, providing a visual for readers. I also want to incorporate this into my article, adding a few visual elements. I think this article does a very good job maintaining a neutral perspective on the show, keeping it informative but not argumentative. I also think the writing is very clear and easy to understand, The information the group is trying to add comes across easily. The group also seems to have a good variety of sources, ranging from information written specifically about the TV show to general media analysis. Overall, this group did a good job with their draft, it is strong and clearly informative. I think the most important details to add would be to add links, specific examples, and one or two images.