User:Vixwint/Athenian Democracy/Rkm22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Vixwint


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Vixwint/Athenian Democracy


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Athenian democracy

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Victoria!

I saw on the top of your sandbox that you had been making edits directly in the Wikipedia article. I looked at the history and saw your user name but when I clicked on it, it took me to your sandbox. So I can only see the stuff you've posted as edits in your sandbox – I'm assuming this is the main content you have changed.

As for the content itself, I think your edits provide useful historical context. I didn't know much about how Athens switched to a democracy and reading about Solon's reforms was interesting. Your information fit the tone of the article – it was neutral, precise, and clear. Like Diego, I didn't see any grammatical errors. I had a couple of questions about that paragraph, however. First, the paragraph mentioned the old system as primarily run by aristocrats – and while it linked to Areopagus, I wasn't quite sure what that was. I'm not sure if that's in the scope of your edits, or if you'd like to do something else with that paragraph. Second (and I'm not sure if you actually have access to this information) but do you know why Solon promoted these reforms? That's a fascinating question given that we see such resistance from Parliamentarians today to expand mass participation in democracy (ie Belgium's resistance to deliberative democracy).

I think both your future edits seem fascinating, particularly the idea of race. Might there be images that point to Athenian's racial views (often drawings and caricatures can tell us what words will not)? Just an idea that could allow you to include multimedia content.

Hope this helps,

Rabhya