User:Vjspez/1965 San Francisco 49ers season/Kclav15 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Vjspez


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * 1965 San Francisco 49ers season


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- More up to date information added

- Introductory sentence is clear, concise, and introduces the main topic of the article

- No apparent description of articles major sections

- Lead slightly long, would divide some of that information into its own subheading

Content:

- Content relevant to the topic

- Content up to date

- Game summaries section lacking content

Tone and balance:

- Content slightly outside the realm of being neutral in certain sections

- Tone needs to be more encyclopedic

Sources and references:

- More variety of sources could greatly improve article and content

Organization:

- Lead organization could be improved by splitting it into subsections

Images and media:

- No images apparent

- Maybe adding a picture or two could add to the depth of the article

Overall impressions:

- Article lacks an encyclopedic tone

- Sparse content in certain section

- Organization Clear for the most part - lead could use better organization

- lack of variety of references