User:Vjspez/1965 San Francisco 49ers season/Noienoah Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Vjspez


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Vjspez/1965_San_Francisco_49ers_season?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 1965 San Francisco 49ers season

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead section has been updated. It has a concise opening sentence. The lead section is overly detailed. The content added is related to the topic. However it is out of place. Game by game analysis should not be in the lead section but rather in its own section.

The content needs to be organized and not just part of the lead. Additionally, a question is posed in the lead section which seems odd and out of place. Suggestions would be maybe in the table of draft picks, figure out which ones were all pro, pro bowl, or hall of fame and color their boxes accordingly.

Overall the content added was beneficial for a summary of the season. However, some of the content seems out of place. It must be more sectioned off by topic. Adding some images may be a good thing to do as well. The 'leagues best offense' idea seems overly emphasized as well.

Also you already published this live to Wikipedia, this is not just located on your sandbox. I recommend reverting the changes made to Wikipedia until you have sufficient feedback.