User:Vkrenkel/Human trafficking in Nigeria/Vkrenkel Peer Review

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Lead
The lead is clear and concise and, for the most part, introduces the topic of human trafficking in Nigeria well. The one thing it is missing is a description of the article's major sections. Human trafficking is defined in the first paragraph of the Human Trafficking of Nigerians in Italy section, but I think it belongs in the lead as it is vital information that is relevant to the whole article, not just one section.

Content
The article does a great job of exploring each aspect of the issue of human trafficking in Nigeria. The content is informative and very up-to-date; most of the information refers to the past five years when discussing current prosecution, protection, and prevention methods. There is a message at the top of the article which says that it is based primarily off of public domain works of the U.S. government, which shows that there is likely a gap in information from a wide variety of sources. Finally, I would have liked to see a bit more information on the history of human trafficking in Nigeria, as this could provide meaningful insight into why trafficking takes the forms it does today, and why prevention and prosecution methods are the way they are.

Tone and balance
This article can be a bit biased at times, but this is because it mostly uses U.S. government public domain works. Because of this, some areas of the article seem to be looking down on the lifestyles of Nigerian people. I would like to note that the writer defines human trafficking as the exploitation of women and children, but men can be victimized by trafficking as well, and I think this is noteworthy enough to mention, even if male victimization rates are lower than those of women and children. In class, we have discussed how the use of the term "modern slavery" to refer to human trafficking is controversial, so I would avoid using that term in the Anti-human trafficking organizations in Nigeria section.

Sources and references
The sources, as I previously mentioned, are primarily public domain works of the U.S. government, so it would be great to have more sources from a Nigerian perspective that could flesh out the information even more. The sources are very up-to-date, with the earliest being in 2005, but most of the sources are from the past few years. The links I checked all worked.

Organization
One thing I found to be strange was that one relevant organization, NAPTIP, which was noted throughout the article, was not referred to in its full name, National Agency for the Prohibition of Traffic in Persons, until its third mention in the article. I would recommend the author move this to NAPTIP's first reference. Another improvement I would suggest would be to split up long sentences, such as the first sentence in the Prosecution section, as it can be a bit confusing and hard to follow. I noticed some commas and periods missing here and there, such as in the first sentence of the last paragraph of the Prosecution section, the fourth paragraph of the Human Trafficking of Nigerians in Italy, the first sentence of the Prevention section, and in the bullet point on Edo State Taskforce Against Human Trafficking (ETAHT) in the Anti-human trafficking organizations in Nigeria section; as well as a spelling error of the word "lessen" and "occur" in the third paragraph and of the Human Trafficking of Nigerians in Italy section. The final paragraph of the Human Trafficking of Nigerians in Italy is missing an "A" in its first sentence. Beyond this, the article was well-structured in a way that allows readers to clearly understand the organization of information and easily find specific facts if needed. I especially like the separation of the topic into prosecution, protection, and prevention, although I think the section on Human Trafficking of Nigerians in Italy could be moved out of prosecution and made into its own section.

Images and media
This article has no images or media, so I think a great way to make it more engaging would be to find relevant media to embed. A more aesthetically pleasing article could bring in more interested readers, and encourage viewers to want to learn more about the topic, or add to it with additional information.

Overall impressions
Overall, I found that the article did a wonderful job of providing a well-rounded image of what the issue of human trafficking looks like in Nigeria. It covered what the issue looks like in the modern day, what is being done to prevent it, and how victims are being cared for in the aftermath, although it could have had more on how it manifested in the past. I liked that the author also included relevant organizations to the cause of fighting trafficking. I found the tone to be a bit biased at times, leaning towards a bit disdainful of the living standards of Nigerians, but this was only sometimes. The sources were all up-to-date, providing the most accurate information for the time being. The organization and structure of the article was great, and easily divided the information in consumable chunks that made sense for trafficking. One way to increase engagement on and interest in the article would be to add an image or two.