User:Vmc24/Disability and disasters/Osewanne Peer Review

General info

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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Section

The lead section was good, it starts out with a clear thesis and allows the reader to know what direction this article is going to go in. I would consider defining this topic or providing a little bit of background for those who are unfamiliar with this topic. It is concise and well-worded.

Content

There is a lot of content in this article but it could be better organized, with subheading to make it easier for the reader to consume this information. I would consider writing a conclusion to summarize what was previously discussed, however, this is an easy fix and one i'm certain can be done. Everything touched upon was relevant to the topic and served the purpose of the article.

Tone and Balance

Tone is rather neutral and simply works to inform the readers about the topic. I thought it was respectful throughout and helped readers who might not know or have never heard about this topic gain a better understanding.

Sources and References

This article presented a good amount of sources for its length and content and for the most part, there are all from within the past couple of years or very recent.

Organization and writing quality

There were two sections in this article. I think making them into smaller chunks will make it easier and using subsections will help your group go further in depth.

Images and Media

This article only contains no image. I would consider finding something more contemporary and relevant to today to help support your topic of disability and disasters.

Talk Page

The talk page has no discussions or contributions.

Overall Impressions

Overall, this article has some good information but it could use more and better organization. I would consider expanding more on the topic and adding more recent pictures!