User:Vmoreno11/Manganese cycle/Elkhazem Peer Review

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My comments are mostly general. So far great job, as far as I can tell you’re covering all necessary aspects of the manganese cycle in an order that makes sense. I realize this is just a draft, but the introduction paragraph could be revised to flow better. I noticed a lot of “it is known that…” type of phrasing and I think by providing adequate references that wording isn’t necessary. Make sure to add references for the figures you are including. Also, unless you are adding more to the sections in Early Earth maybe consider combining them. Overall great job on your draft.