User:Vmoreno11/Manganese cycle/Herweckk Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Farrelil, Cassidymwagner, Stonesar, Vmoreno11


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Vmoreno11/Manganese_cycle?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Manganese cycle

Evaluate the drafted changes
The current section titled "Global Manganese Cycle" reads like it could be the lead section at the top of the article. I think it gives a nice, concise overview of what manganese is, where it's relevant, and why it's important.

All sections include an abundance of great information, and they are well written. There does seem to be a lot of jargon used throughout, particularly in the 'Early Earth' section. Maybe some of this can be explained further, or written in a more simplified way so that people without a strong background in this subject can more easily follow along with what's written. Although, I know it might be difficult to distill this information down any further.

The 'Anthropogenic influences' section has a lot of subheaders which makes this section read a bit choppy. I understand the intent of the subheaders, but I think some of them can just stand alone as individual paragraphs without the header, such

as the different types of impacts from mining & mineral processing.

Overall, this is a strong page and a great improvement over the original page that only had a few sentences. The figures/graphics included are relevant and helpful, and there are extensive references used.