User:Volt101/Virtual reality applications/N.EDU5287 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Volt101


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Virtual reality applications


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
LEAD

The draft assigned to me pertaining to the article on ‘Virtual Reality Applications’ does not include a Lead. The Lead from the original article was not edited rather the draft includes a specific section focused on how Virtual Reality has been used in High School and College Education. Thus, a review of the lead can not be made accordingly to this draft.

CONTENT

The content that was included by my peer is very relevant to the topic on Virtual Reality Applications and links to the field of education as well. The content added is up-to-date since the sources used to cite the statements made are relatively recent. Information regarding Wikipedia’s equity gaps were not included in this draft nor topics related to historically underrepresented populations.

TONE & BALANCE

The content that was included in the draft takes a neutral stance. No biased appears to be taken nor does the draft persuade the reader in favour/away of a position. However, I believe that more content can be included in the draft that discusses the advantages and disadvantages of using VR applications in education while doing so through a neutral stance.

SOURCES & REFERENCES

All the content in the ‘High School and College Education’ section of the virtual reality applications draft article is backed up by up-to-date reliable secondary source of information. In the draft this statement is made using a cited source “Immersive Virtual Reality is used in the High school classroom as a tool to help students learn and be immersed in their subject matter.” However, the cited source discusses this in a Chinese educational context. Therefore, it is important that this is clarified or an alternative source is used to support the aforementioned claim. Upon reviewing this, it seems that the content does not accurately reflect what the cited sources indicate. The sources written are considerably by a diverse spectrum of authors. They range from authors based in China, Canada, and America. However, they do not include historically marginalized individuals. I was able to find more sources pertaining to the content included in the draft. They are authentic, reliable, and up-to-date sources. As a suggestion for my peer, it can be located on google scholar. You may chose what you find most suitable. It may assist you in including more sources that provide you with in depth information. I have checked all the links in the draft. Luckily, they all work and are easy to access through a viewers institution. However, it may be difficult for other wikipedia readers who are not students to access. Therefore, google scholar would be a good alternative for easily accessible and reliable sources.

ORGANIZATION

The content added thus far is well written. The content is comprehensible, to the point, and easy to read. No grammatical or spelling errors were located while editing this article. There is only one section in the draft therefore, I cannot make a claim to the organization of sections (i.e., whether they are broken down to reflect major points of the topic). However, the paragraph that was included had a good flow and sentences were organized.

IMAGES AND MEDIA

The draft did not include images. However, the article itself which I have gone through included stimulating images. All the images in the original article were well captioned to enhance readers’ understanding of the topic. The images are laid out in a visually appealing way and adhere to wikipedia’s copyright regulations.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS

The information included was minor but pertained to an important context. It would make a good addition to the article being its own section. Many hyperlinks could have been included to link readers’ to additional information they may be interested in or would facilitate to clarify terms. For example, in the paragraph you mention STEM, a link to the wikipedia page pertaining to this term could have been included or a video on examples of it. Furthermore, information could have been included regarding the issues that arise from using virtual reality applications in education as well as the benefits using a neutral tone.