User:Voverbo/Dancing plague of 1518/IllyFerg Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Voverbo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Voverbo/Dancing plague of 1518


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dancing plague of 1518

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead is clear and concise and introduces the information that will be in the article. The content added is relevant to the article and I liked how there was an explanation of the food poisoning theory and elaborating how this could have caused the dancing plague. I particularly think that having a counterargument to the theory is a great way to present the information since the origin of the disease is highly speculated. Also the stress induced mass hysteria is quite interesting as well and it includes relevant information. Both sections added are concise and easy to follow. The tone is informative and doesn't stray away by including fluff words, the tone is concise and provides just the facts and speculation. The sources are linked and are accessible and contribute to the information in the article. One of the sources though, source 10 from PBS might not need to be included, there is no author of that source or other sources that are linked to it through the PBS article. The organization of the article is good, I don't really have any input there.