User:Voverbo/Dancing plague of 1518/Katebryan Peer Review

Lead:

The lead is brief but gives a good introduction into the topic. I think that this could be lengthened by a few sentences to give more context and explain how the rest of the article will dive into the subject.

Content:

The first sentence is very broad and leads the reader with a lot of questions. I think that the contents of the article should start with the first case of the Dancing Plague (as it is) but continue to give more details of how the disease spread from that first case. The second part of the Events part of the article seems to be very opinionated especially when it says "it is not known why". The wording is not professional and goes against Wikipedia's suggested language. The third paragraph in the Events section is disorganized but I think it is reasonable to include methods of treatment used during the 1500s in the article.

I think the name of the next section of the article, Veracity of Deaths, needs to be changed to sound less opinionated. The second sentence that starts with "some sources" needs to be citied and broken down into how the information of how many people died per day was found. How can you know how many deaths there were if the city where the plague took place didn't have any record of how many people died? The second portion of Veracity of Deaths is messy and should be edited to provide better grammatical accuracy. "John Waller was a local scientist who wrote several first-hand accounts of the Dancing Plague..." or whoever he was, it just needs to give more context. Also there seems to be many doubts about the accuracy of information in the article, this needs to cleared up and deleted from the article.

The third section titled Modern theories is organized and, for the most part, well written. I do think you should think about deleting the quote from John Waller since Wikipedia recommends not using any direct quotes in articles- if anything the quote needs to be shortened tremendously. There seems to be too many references to John Waller which leads readers to question whether the article is good source of information over the topic.

I'm not sure if you could find more pictures of the event but I think it could be nice to include a map of where the Dancing Plague took place.