User:Voverbo/Dancing plague of 1518/KindleHoodie Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Voverbo/Dancing plague of 1518


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Voverbo/Dancing_plague_of_1518?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dancing plague of 1518
 * Dancing plague of 1518

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Lead
 * Information seems identical from original article.
 * The plague is briefly explained, but does not go over any parts of the article beyond the fact of how many people were infected.
 * The lead could benefit from additional information about the events that took place, and introducing the modern theories of food poisonings and stress-induced mass hysteria, alongside additional theories you find.
 * A short and sweet lead can work, so I don't think a ton of information will be necessary to add, but it needs more in its current state.
 * Content
 * Content also seems identical from original article, but some citations have gotten lost (I will presume most got lost while information was being transferred around).
 * In its current state, the articles are organized pretty well, and all sections have a decent amount of information. I do not know what information and sources you plan to add to these, but if available, it wouldn't hurt to add more and specify on aspects related to the plague.
 * Articles as of now are easy to read.
 * The second paragraph under Food Poisoning is mostly just a quote. I think it would benefit from a neutral explanation of what John Waller is arguing for.
 * Tone and Balance
 * Both seem good as of now. The article neutrally covers information and takes information from multiple possible theories, neither of them seem to have a bias over the other.
 * Sources and References
 * Since no new content seems to be added, I cannot say for sure if any new references back up said information.
 * However, looking at the original page, there is a nice collection of sources available.
 * Sources range from articles, journals, and books.
 * One of the links ("Mystery explained? 'Dancing Plague' of 1518, the bizarre dance that killed dozens") leads to a 404; it's possible there are others to look into as well.
 * There are a few citations that are missing citations.
 * Images and Media
 * The draft contains no images or media, but if possible, I think it would benefit the page, as it is a more strange event in history.
 * Overall Impressions
 * While I cannot necessarily comment on if the article was improved as it seems 1-1 (unless I've missed something, then this is a little awkward), the article gives you a lot to start out with. Any additional information to flesh out what is already there, as well as potential new information if it is available would be the best way going forward. I also think you should go through your sources and make sure they're links are functioning and are supporting your article. I believe I have overheard bits and pieces from this group, so I think this will turn out well!