User:Vsiguenza/Muted group theory/Lynnpj29 Peer Review

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Vsiguenza
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Lead
The lead is clear and provides a definition, brief history, and current applications of muted group theory. The lead is more concise than the original version, streamlining some of the redundancies.

Content
The content is very relevant and thorough, discussing the origins of muted group theory to more current applications and examples. It does not appear to be missing information; if anything, there might be too much information. One suggestion would be to further streamline some sections: For example, perhaps the Background and Genesis sections could be combined and tightened. Lastly, the article is a positive step in addressing Wikipedia’s equity gaps, as it covers how muted group theory applies to marginalized groups with regard to race, age, gender, sexuality, disability, and more.

Tone and Balance
Overall, the content of the article is pretty neutral. The Critiques section also helps provide a balanced view.

Sources and References
The article is really well-cited, with a variety of current sources by diverse authors. Suggest adding citations for these sections, if available:


 * According to Sheila Jeffreys, “religion founds men's authority over women and makes resistance difficult, because fear of divine punishment keeps women in their place.”
 * In traditional pedagogical practices in the United States' educational institutions, critical race theorists argue that the official school curriculum is designed to maintain a “White supremacist master script.” As Swartz contends, master scripting sets the standard knowledge for students, which legitimizes “dominant, white, upper-class, male voices” and mutes people of color’s perspectives.
 * Mark Orbe, a communication theorist, has suggested that in the U.S. the dominant group consists of white, heterosexual, middle-class, males. Thus, groups that distinguish themselves from the dominant one in terms of race, age, gender, sexual orientation, and economic status can potentially be silenced or muted.

Lastly, is there something missing under the “Expansion” heading? See: Source

Organization
The article is well-organized, with clearly labeled sections. Perhaps Origin, History, and Genesis could be combined; these seem like synonymous headings.

Other small edits:


 * Muted Group Theory (MGT) is a communication theory developed by cultural anthropologist Edwin Ardener and feminist scholar Shirley Ardener in 1975, that exposes the sociolinguistic power imbalances that can suppress social groups' voices. (delete comma)
 * In contrast, women's perspectives is considered insignificant, falling into the muted category with the graph's broken line. (are)
 * For instance, women and men that are of the same social rank are usually addressed by asymmetrical usages of first and last name… (who)
 * Some adult males continue their childhood by labeling adult female companions “dolls.”. (extra period)
 * In addition, Deborah Tannen, the theorist that created Genderlect Theory, criticizes feminist scholars like Kramarae for assuming that men are trying to control women. (who)
 * Kramarae’s research on women and Orbe’s work on African American men utilize this framework to dissect the communicative experiences of non dominant, or co-cultural, group members. (one word, although it’s hyphenated throughout the article)

Images and Media
The article contains several images, helping to graphically illustrated muted group theory and its process. It also contains images to illustrate some of the applications of muted group among marginalized groups. The photos are well-captioned.

Overall impressions
The information added makes the article more up-to-date. In addition, some sections were streamlined for clarity and rewritten in a more neutral tone. Overall, nice job with the edits!