User:Vsmithmartin/Abu Nuwas/Georgialeakey Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Vsmithmartin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Vsmithmartin/Abu_Nuwas


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Abu Nuwas

Evaluate the drafted changes
The guiding questions about the lead are not relevant to this peer review because the edits to the article were done to a subsection.

The content of the article is relevant, up to date, and properly sourced. It discussed themes of homoeroticism in Persian poetry, which is an underrepresented subject in the article.

The edited content is mostly neutral, there is one sentence that I don't think is necessary to add. The sentence "While he expresses his sexual preference in his poetry, he does not embody the modern sense of a "homosexual."," in my opinion, should be omitted because it is more commentary than evidence (it is also not tied to a source directly), and also because the following sentence allows the reader to make the same conclusion based on cited information. Other than that, I find everything else to be necessary, neutral, and informative.

No images were added. Although I think they would help, I understand if it's not possible because of copyright issues.

The writing is clear and concise, and I can tell that there was attention given to proof-reading the work by the author.

The only thing that I would change is that sentence I mentioned. The work is helpful for me because I think the author's use of separately formatted paragraphs is something I will implement into my article edits.

Well done! Super interesting topic and contributions.