User:Vulpestooth/Dinosaur reproduction/Daisysandpeaches Peer Review

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Vulpestooth
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 * User:Vulpestooth/Dinosaur reproduction
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Good job on keeping a neutral tone!

The lead claims that most dinosaurs did not give parental care to their young but in your parental care section there's a claim that many fossils show evidence of care. I'm not sure if this was an oversight on updating preexisting sections or if the many fossils found were specific to protoceratop andrewsi only. Either way this should be a quick wording fix

In the nest building section, I would suggest strengthening the incubation info. What do these open nests look like? What were the building materials used? Automatically I thought of nests like what modern birds use. What was the coloration of open incubated eggs? It may be worth it to add a wiki link on microbial respiration. Additionally, the last line of the section would make more sense before the switch to talking about incubation. Here's what I would suggest:

"Eggs of hadrosaurs have been associated with fine-grain pedogenic sediments where their eggs were left to incubate via microbial respiration. Early dinosaur eggs also lacked color, suggesting the eggs did not need to blend in with the environment to avoid predation as they were hidden in mounds while incubation occurred [7]. Other dinosaurs may have incubated..."

I'm curious to see how your sections fit in with the preexisting ones...