User:Vzhan/Feminism in China/Xinlian Xu Peer Review

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Hi Vzhan

I found your some of your sentences are hard to understand, so I drafted my version as a suggestion.

After the release of the Feminist Five, Hong Fincher interviewed the female activist, which inspired her to write a book titled Betraying Big Brother: The Feminist Awakening in China, released in 2018.

Because of the Feminist Five activity's arrestment, there were not many feminist activities in China. It became challenging to make activism a full-time job in China because of the financial support for their activist work and personal means. "... it is now illegal to accept funding from foundations that have not established offices in China," the China Change article said (who said?). Therefore, it stops recruits from joining the feminist movement.

Members of Feminist Five face the consequences of their behaviour. Wu Rongrong (武嵘嵘) was banned from leaving China for ten years. In 2017, Wu finally renewed her passport and studied Law in Hong Kong.

Zheng Churan, another member of the Feminist Five, protested against Donald Trump and pointed out his adverse influence on females.

The actions of the Feminist Five lead to the emergence in popularity, within China, of an ongoing movement called the #MeToo movement. (the sentence is hard to understand)

Therefore, many university students, both female and male, gathered to sign petitions against harassment in China. The younger generation takes action to show that they are dealing with these issues in China.