User:WThiels/The Great North Road/Watermelemily Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) User:WThiels


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:WThiels/The Great North Road


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Already noted that intro is incomplete. Needs to lay out what the rest of the article will be about.

Format needs to be updated - bolded titles, sources added. Once bolded aspects are added and the intro is complete it will look right like other wiki articles.

Laid out well, neutral tone throughout. The right amount of detail.

I wouldn't take anything out, it all serves a purpose to the topic and is well written. Maybe take out phrases like 'seem to have a different purposes' (last paragraph) and find out what the answer is and then source it.

Biggest problem is lack of sources. Nothing is sourced.

Organization is the greatest strength. I cannot find any grammatical areas or things to fix in terms of writing.