User:WadeBucket/Republic of the Congo Civil War (1993–1994)/JSCC3412 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

WadeBucket


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Republic of the Congo Civil War (1993-1994) Sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Republic of the Congo Civil War (1993-1994)

Lead
Your lead paragraph is great! It is clear and concise. You've clearly explained that this was the first of a number of related conflicts, which clears up any confusion for the reader. You've also done a good job of setting up the body sections of your article by giving the reader an idea of what you'll be talking about, specifically with the sentence regarding the aftermath of this conflict. Overall, I don't think you need to make any major changes to your lead paragraph.

Content
First and foremost, you've done an excellent job of adding content to an article that was severely lacking. The structure of your draft also makes perfect sense. You started with background information, then the conflict itself, and then the aftermath. If you add any more sections, just make sure they continue with this pattern, but I'm confident you will do that.

My only suggestion is that you expand the Militia Fighting section as much as you can. To me, that feels like the meat and potatoes of your article because it is describing the actual war itself.

No issues with sentence structure/grammar. You are a great writer and you've done a good job of structuring your paragraphs in a way that makes sense. Overall, all of the information is relevant and adds to the article.

Tone and Balance
I don't see any major issues with tone and balance. My only suggestion here is that you spend a little more time discussing the ethnic tensions that underlay the war in a fair and balanced way. That detail is extremely relevant and deserves to be addressed in detailed way that doesn't lead towards one side or the other.

Sources and References
Your sources all seem good. Just remember the requirements for the sources outlined in the project instructions (i.e. 5 academic sources, 2 African sources, etc.). Keep finding good sources!

Organization
As I mentioned before, your organization of the different sections is great. It all makes sense. Keep going with the organizational structure that you're currently using and just make sure that when you add new sections, they are in a place that makes logical sense. Also previously mentioned, no issues with spelling, grammar, or structure.

Images and Media
You don't currently have any media, so I don't need to comment on this. If you can find some media, that would be great! I think it would add a lot.

Overall Impression
Overall, you've made a really impressive contribution to this article so far. As I mentioned, you can probably expand the later sections about Militia Fighting, Effects of the War, and the Relevant Groups, but I'm sure you already have plans for that. This is an excellent draft. Good job!