User:Wagz22/Ethnic violence in South Sudan/RickSwordfire17 Peer Review

- Compared to the original article, I appreciate the proposed ToC's focus on the more prevalent groups through weighting based on frequency of conflict-involvement

- Another good call is the creation of modern-conflict sections since a lot of the original article focuses on long withstanding bouts between small groups.

- The emphasis on more specific events, responses, etc. feels like a much better course of action.

- Huge fan of creating a set of context categories to set up the meat of the article with proper information.

- Candidly, there is a TON of information that you're covering. That's not to say you bit off more than you can chew, but there is less margin for error (formatting wise) than other articles because of the sheer scope of the subject. One recommendation I might make would be to do a timeline for each individual group rather than an overlapping timeline of all conflict. Keeps it more manageable, in my opinion.

- going off this, you could also have a timeline of each major conflict and just include the parties involved earlier as context.

= DAY 2 COMMENTS = - I really love the introduction as a table-setter of sorts for the following sections. It serves as a nice roadmap for what's a very diverse topic.

- I would even recommend putting the historical context sections under the introduction since the are the events that really paint the contextual pictures.

- 'Causes of Ethnic violence' relates directly to Sudan, I assume. But if not, keep it micro.

- If the Dinka and Neur really are the only two major groups, you may want to isolate that section on its own and just include any other players in the list of conflicts.