User:WanjiaRuan/P1Harmony/Ayoung22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing WanjiaRuan's work.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:WanjiaRuan/P1Harmony?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * P1Harmony

Lead
The lead is updated to reflect recent updates to P1Harmony. It has a clear and concise introduction. It is not too overly detailed.

Content
The work is consistent to the topic.

Tone and Balance
Overall, the tone is neutral however, there is some parts where it feels like P1Harmony is being described in a positive connotation. For example, this sentence:

"With this album, P1Harmony conveys a more positive message to an unholy world."

It seems like it is calling the world unholy, which has it's own connotation. If the album was described as so from a reliable source, there should also be a source cited.

Sources and References
The sources are all reliable and the links work.

Organization
The content is well-written. It is well organized with easy to follow headings and sections that describe the group's debut and their active years.