User:WanjiaRuan/P1Harmony/Claptonic Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wanjiaruan


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:WanjiaRuan/P1Harmony?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * P1Harmony

Evaluate the drafted changes
With the new lead in the first paragraph of the article, more information about the group is provided and it is concise.

It provides a solid introduction for the details that are about to be displayed in the article.

Contents are up-to-date with the group's 2023 activities are all recorded as well.

Compared to the original article, the history of the group has been written in more detail year by year and more detail in the albums that they have released, which makes the history section more abundant.

Also, 'Artistry' and 'Philanthropy' section has been added to provide more context for the group's activity.

The tone is overall neutral, with the contents focusing on explaining the history of the group in a chronological order. I didn't see any sentences that seems biased.

There is an abundant number of sources that provides details on each of the sections, especially regarding the exact number of sales and dates of the music / video that they have released. Since this is a page for a music group that is relatively recent, no scholarly article is needed.

Since there is only one photo of the group, I do suggest that the article be provided with more photos (maybe one or two) describing the group's activity for each periods in the history section.

The content is organized and while the discography section is large, it is easy to comprehend and each albums / songs have all the details that one might need to find such as the sales and title tracks.