User:Warren/Old Mac pages

Lead sentence
The Full Product Name (also sold as other product name) is a personal computer designed, manufactured and sold by Apple Computer, Inc. from Month Year to Month Year.


 * Bold the machine names. MOS:BOLD
 * No wikilinks in the machine name. MOS:BOLDAVOID
 * No more than three names in the lead sentence. WP:LEADCLUTTER
 * No references should be needed as the information presented will be minimal and not controversial. Dates are verifiable later in the article.
 * No market-specific qualifiers. ("sold in Japan as")
 * Not important enough for sentence #1.
 * No time-specific qualifiers. ("is a discontinued personal computer")
 * Saying the start/end dates makes this clear.
 * No form factor qualifiers. ("is an all-in-one personal computer")
 * The image and Infobox details can highlight this. And it can go in sentence #2.
 * No specification qualifiers. ("is a 68040-based personal computer.")
 * Too technical for sentence #1.
 * No categorization qualifiers. ("is a part of the Power Macintosh family.")
 * The product name will include this information for the most part; don't torture the sentence to squeeze in a wikilink. Also, it's in the Infobox.
 * "Apple Computer, Inc.", not "Apple Inc." or "(now known as Apple Inc.)"
 * The fact that the company renamed itself 20 years later isn't relevant to a basic description of the product.
 * No days of the month. ("from April 4, 1993 to May 11, 1994")
 * It's just not important enough. Exact dates are in the Infobox and the Models section.
 * No comma between month and year. ("from January, 1995 to February, 1997.")
 * Standard per MOS:DATE.

Sentence two

 * Position the computer relative to others from the same time period.

Sentence three

 * An interesting detail. Something about the case, e.g.

Second paragraph

 * Expand on contextualization of the machine's relevance, positioning and importance in the lineup. If price is relevant to the discussion, it can be mentioned here.
 * Mentioning the CPU is fine but don't get hung up on specifications. There is space for that later.

Third paragraph

 * Magazine reviews and other quotable content from the product's introduction, and/or retrospective.

Final paragraph

 * One or two sentences that identify what happened when the machine was discontinued.
 * If this is the final machine in a series, mention that.
 * Probably not necessary to repeat the date.

Category order

 * Product families, case type, processor type