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The whole article is written and sectioned off greatly. However, there aren't enough citations proving whether or not Gerard is everything the article says about him. Which makes this article non-notable. You go into great detail about the specifics of his early life as a top athlete but there is no proof of it actually happening. It's almost as if this article was posted to help promote themselves. Especially with the outstanding credentials under his name. In the first citation noted, I couldn't find his name anywhere on the Washington post. As well as clicking the external link on the bottom of the page. A error 404 pops up.

The tone for this article would be informative as it displays factual evidence towards the accomplishments Gerard Bramwell Long as achieved in his lifetime so far. So the tone so far is indeed neutral and not promotional. I've tried to do some background research on Gerard, but they just use this wiki article as a reference to all their known information about him. Except this website that actually has dates for everything he has done. He joined Alpha USA in 2006 and was the CEO for 7 years, so all the way to 2014. When he resigned from Alpha USA due to his daughter drowning in the lake. I will go back and edit the article officially now that we have some dates and the information lines up. Here is my source.

The assigned article
 * A subject is not notable if there is not enough secondary sourcing to prove it should have an article...that may be true here, but be careful with your wording (that "he is everything the article says about him" is another matter). And he actually IS mentioned in the WaPo article: on the second page. That his "official" link is dead is interesting: he may well be scrubbed from that company's history, if he got fired or whatever. That is worth investigating. The other thing you should really comment on is the tone. Neutral tone is mandatory, promotional tone is not OK, promotional tone in an unverified article is very much not OK. Whether he is notable or not is an interesting thing; it takes some experience to judge how the community thinks about that. The Chicago Tribune article is a good indication that he'll pass WP:GNG, and the Washington Post article also contains significant coverage. But the only other article that I find in Google News is a 2014 article about his child's death--and if that is all it is, and if two of the three are about the child, then notability is even more questionable. Finally, the article has a ton of tags. Look at them, and check to see if you think they are still valid. I've upped your grade for this exercise by 15 points. Dr Aaij (talk) 20:58, 15 June 2019 (UTC)