User:Wcubias/Consumer Reports/Jacksonfarr1 Peer Review

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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Consumer Reports

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

- The lead on the actual wiki page looks pretty good, I don't think you need to contribute any info there.

- The content is definitely relevant to the topic and I think a founding sub heading is important. There's also a sub heading for history, but it looks like it talks more about Consumer Reports opposed to Consumer Research. Are you going to put them together or, or move them around? It kinda seems like the history should go towards the start but just an idea.

- In your sand box, you only have one source but I looked at your bibliography and you have 3 more. It looks like you have a source on the connection between the Consumers Union and Consumers Research. Maybe you could pull some of the information form that to include on the paragraph that you have.

- I think your tone sounds great, it's appears neutral and unbiased. This is something I had a hard time with so props

- Organization and flow of the paragraph sounds good.

- I don't think you really need any pictures for your contribution, but maybe if you could find one of like the original building that the company was in or a picture of FJ Schlink and Stuart Chase, that could be cool.

-Spelling and grammar:

- Take out the "the" at the start before 1927

- Take out the first to "led to Schlink to found the company"