User:Wedls/Great European immigration wave to Argentina/Aswanson29 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wedls


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://docs.google.com/document/d/16A5K0SwHr7GO-ZvQ1hEtpfWC4QVOaLaLE00-wsBE9Ag/edit


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://docs.google.com/document/d/16A5K0SwHr7GO-ZvQ1hEtpfWC4QVOaLaLE00-wsBE9Ag/edit

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The Lead succinctly reflects what the article wants to talk about. The introductory sentence refers to the economic and political changes caused by the immigrants in Argentina. However, the article references mutinous immigrants who arrived, and the first sentence doesn't reflect that. The lead does a good job in summarizing the ethnic makeup of the immigrants and the causes of immigration. The lead is concise, and I think it does a good job in preluding what the article will discuss later on.

Content:

Yes. The content does a good job because it discusses the ethnic makeup of the immigrants, their effect on politics and the economy. The content is up to date. The article doesn't reference viewpoints that come from underserved communities. Perhaps they could've included a section on racial conflicts with native Argentinians and immigrants, but Argentina didn't have a large slave population. They accurately attributed the reasons for immigration as appearing modern (scientific racism). All the references are well sourced because they come from professors and academic websites. To improve the content, I would have liked to see some of the modern effects of Argentina's immigration. In other words, how have politicians reconciled with Argentina's identity as an all white nation when Brazil, its neighbor, had over 10 million slaves? They should referenced the Argentine politician who said they are a nation of Europeans in 2012 and other Afro-Argentine movements. The content shouldn't be entirely a historical retelling of European immigration. As far as the neutrality, European immigration isn't a contentious topic, so the article isn't prone to preferring a political position over another. All the sources are well done. I checked all the links and they work. The article doesn't have any images or media, but it includes references to try and include some. I think this would add to the article.

Final thoughts:

The article accurately includes sections on the causes and economic experiences of European immigrants in Argentina. However, I would have liked to see a discussion on the effects of this policy today. Do Europeans trace a lot of their ancestry to Argentina? And what is the effect of this policy on Argentina's image in comparison to other Latin American countries like Brazil who have large mixed populations? If they answer both of these questions, it'd improve the article a lot. I also think each section referring to new paragraphs are unnecessary. Sometimes you should include blocks of text and don't need to describe what they are.