User:Weloveflowers/Catharine Beecher/AttackWorm22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Group 5)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Weloveflowers/Catharine_Beecher?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Catharine Beecher

Evaluate the drafted changes
I am sorry to hear that your previously gathered information wasn't saved and that you have to start over, I'm sure you all have put a lot of time and effort into this project so far! Instead of a peer review, I will try to provide some helpful ideas that will help you with your efforts to edit this wiki page.

In the biography section where it says "she was taught the limited curriculum available to young women", you could perhaps talk about the different subjects that were available in the given curriculum.

Within the female seminary section, it talks about how there were many well-known alumnae from the seminary, but none are listed. I wonder if there are any alumnae that made significant contributions to the field of home economics/FCS? Additionally, perhaps there is evidence of the different experiments that were performed, especially in regards to the Graham Diet (maybe this could be another section of the page?). Also, which types of food were previously served and which ones were introduced to the seminary after the dinner?

In the section Midlife in the West, it states that "she opened a female seminary" in Cincinnati, but it never refers to an actual seminary, which might be something you would be able to find online. Alternatively, this information may also be found within the article towards the end in the list of schools, and could potentially be referenced earlier on the page.

In the Views on and advocacy of education section, it says that she was "a strong advocate of the inclusion of daily physical education in women's schooling", and talks about a program of calisthenics she developed. Maybe there are additional ways that she was involved/advocated that are not listed within this article. Also, if you look in the section "views on education" below this section, you may also notice that the calisthenic program is mentioned a second time in very similar wording, perhaps this could be deleted?

Under the Women as educators section, it states that "Beecher believed that women have inherent qualities that make them the preferred gender as teachers". Perhaps there is evidence of the specific qualities that Beecher thinks women have as teachers in further readings.

Within the Influential changes over time section, it mentions that she valued the idea that kids should be kids, and that she supported kindergartens. I'm sure there are additional articles that would talk about what kindergartens were like during this time, or maybe how Beecher supported these kindergartens, whether monetarily or through advocacy efforts.

Additionally, I'm sure Beecher has a much larger legacy than what was mentioned in this article. The article mentions buildings named for Beecher, but maybe there are other ways in which Beecher has touched the world.

= Good luck with your future editing, I hope this helps! =