User:Wesleymuse/Boston Massacre/ZlangePSTCC Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wesley Muse


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wesleymuse/Boston_Massacre?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wesleymuse/Boston_Massacre?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content of the edit is good, however, there are just a few things I would reword

"Started as a street fight at first" could be part of "their were tensions raised by taxes" could be reworded to "Rising tensions from the raise in taxes formed a mob breaking out and what started as a street fight escalated quickly to the killing of 5 people."