User:Western2023/Latin American liberation theology/Bluehunter19 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Western2023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Western2023/Latin_American_liberation_theology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Broadly speaking, this is a great body of information from which you can chisel into a fine article. A few thoughts:

The grammar in this article requires some refinement; a lot of commas are needed in places they currently do not exist, and that greatly hurts the flow of the article. Also, focus a bit more on the flow of your writing in general. It doesn't need to be the finest prose ever, but sentences of similar length follow each other too consistently, and the information isn't yet conveyed in the best manner.

The Camillo Torres section could use some extra editing. His quotes could be shortened to only the vital information to allow for more room for analysis; about 70% of that section is quotes, and that's too much for the style we're looking for. Cut out the crust around the crucial portions and make it more obvious whether the descriptions of Torres are coming from you, or a source.

The Colombia 3.5 section is the stronger of the two. The only new suggestion would be to remove opinion words like "important" unless it's in a quote from another source, or if it follows a qualifier like "one of the most." Neutrality is the goal.

Overall, the article would be buoyed by using more sources. This is a conversation between writers, and the discussion is always improved when you add more quality voices to the mix.

This is a solid rough draft that can become a great addition to the article. Keep working hard at it!