User:Western2023/Latin American liberation theology/Revengemin Button Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User: Western2023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Western2023


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Latin American liberation theology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead section is not really written, so no further feedback can be given.

Content: In what will be a common theme in this review, the draft is not yet coherent. It consists mostly of scraps (and possibly quotes). It is really more of an assemblage of pre-draft materials than a version of an article section, and therefore difficult to give feedback on. However, it does seem that the draft is missing a good explanation of what Camillo Torres added to the body of liberation theology and thus why this should be a section at all, a lot of the words are about the general state of Colombia during Torres' activities there.

Tone and balance: It is hard to evaluate tone and balance because the draft is so fragmentary it is very hard to discern the intended meaning. It does seem that there is no intentional effort at persuasion, but there do appear to be quotes from Camillo Torres himself, which should be handled carefully as they are not neutral secondary sources.

Sources and references: There are no references in the draft at all, but the sources seem alright but two of the links do not work, and only one is actually a hyperlink, the others are just text. None of the sources are cited using the citation tool within the visual editor, and reside instead at the bottom of the draft as plain text.

Organization: As aforementioned, the draft is not written in coherent and grammatically correct English, but in this case that makes it easy to evaluate for this category: the draft is not properly organized. The section names also read like notes rather than section titles.

Overall impressions: The draft undoubtedly is supposed to address an important part of liberation theology: its effects on Camillo Torres and the effects Camillo Torres had on it, but as it stands it reads like notes which can be understood only by the author. As such, it would be almost improper to judge it harshly for failing to do the job of a draft in its pre-draft state. In brief: a lot more writing is needed.