User:Western2023/Latin American liberation theology/Studentbreese Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Western2023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Western2023/Latin American liberation theology


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Latin American liberation theology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I don't think the draft changes the lead, nor does it need to.

Content: I think in general it would be really good for your article to be a lot more specific: name key figures, key groups, state what kinds of actions they took, give time frames, and always relate it back to Liberation Theology. As it stands, your draft seems more like a brief overview of Colombia during the 1970s, rather than a history of Liberation Theology in Colombia. You talk about repression and human rights concerns, so maybe you could find some information on how Liberation Theologians contributed to Truth Commissions, or what kind of work they did to help people in Colombia during this time?

Tone and Balance: You have a neutral and informative tone that is fit for Wikipedia.

Sources and References: It seems like some of the things you cite are primary sources, like "Thoughts on Liberation Theology by Camilo Torres." I believe Wikipedia does not allow for information solely from a primary source, and prefers secondary sources like the other articles you've found. Also, there are no citations within the draft itself. It is just a draft, but those are super important to put in by the time you're done.

Organization: You use "Columbia" and "Columbian" instead of Colombia and Colombian. This is an important distinction to make, especially as you are dealing with Colombia itself. I also kind of have a hard time telling where the article starts or what the Colombia 3.5 heading means. Is the Camilo Torres section part of the article? Another thing is it's kind of hard to read the draft. I'm not sure I understand what you're trying to say in a lot of places because the sentences are more like quick thoughts rather than full sentences.