User:Wgwilliams/Adultification bias/Alexalathom Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wgwilliams


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Adultification_bias&oldid=1145686137
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Adultification_bias&oldid=1145686137

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * Not much was added to this section which I think is okay because it is pretty well written and explained well.

Content / Organization


 * Overall I think the information you added is very well written and adds good points to the article. One main point to consider would be to explain a little bit more after making certain claims.
 * For example, in the sentence "White adolescence is frequently pictured through films but Black adolescence is not commonly portrayed", it might be helpful to include what the effect of this lack of portrayal in films is. I'm not completely sure if this is correct, but I feel like for Wikipedia it's better to state facts even if they seem implied.
 * In the healthcare section, I wonder if the sentence you added about racial and ethnic minorities being more medically vulnerable could be seen as not being neutral? Potentially adding more specific evidence from a source or citing one that you got this information from could help.
 * I really like that you added a section on mental health because I think it's an aspect that isn't talked about enough with issues like this.
 * Something to look at is the last sentence about barriers. I'm not sure if you were planning to, but maybe you could go more in depth about these barriers since you did cite a source for that information and I think it could be very interesting. I was also wondering what exactly you meant by "lack of knowledge"; did you mean a lack of access to knowledge perhaps?
 * Also, a very small thing I saw that's a quick fix was just adding the word study after 2020 at the end of the healthcare section. Super small lol.
 * In the history section, the last sentence you added included the terms jezebel, mammy, and sapphire; did you mean to have that repeated since it's also mentioned later in the relationships to other stereotypes section? I think you could go without one of them, but if you did that on purpose, I can also see why.
 * Also in the history section when you mentioned the hyper-sexualization of children--was it just enslaved children or was it all enslaved people that experienced this hyper-sexualization?

Images / Media

Overall Impressions
 * Are there any images or media you considered including? It could help the overall look of the article, but I also can understand that this is slightly difficult to find images to add. Potentially a graph of some sort could aid in the mentions of statistics?


 * Overall I think this is an important and interesting topic, so I really enjoyed reading it. All of your contributions were also very well written, so I think you're doing great so far and am looking forward to reading anything else you add! :)