User:Whispersarai/Attention seeking/TorresM16 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

( Whispersarai )


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Talk:Attention seeking


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Attention seeking

Evaluate the drafted changes
When I was reading the introduction section I had to reread the introduction multiple times before I could get a better understanding of your topic. I feel like there is an easier way to clear up your articles introduction to grab the readers attention quicker and avoid the reader to reread the material before understanding what will be discussed in the article. In the article also make sure that the introduction includes the subtopics that are on the article with maybe a brief, easy to understand description of the subtopics.

I did not quiet understand the subtopic "Different pathologies or context" and what this topic has to do with attention seeking, maybe if there was a clear explanation of why it is important to the subtopic it would be easier to read and more appealing. Also add a brief explanation to the first three pathologies or context to the subtopic "In different Pathologies or Context" sense the rest of the terms have descriptions.

The terms and different conditions all have a reliable back up source. Although the organization in the article could use some work just making it easier to read. There are not any images to your article and I personally think that is okay, but it would also be okay to add an image of a bubble map or somewhere in that idea.

Overall I think the article is short and there isn't much about the history of Attention Seeking or anything that I understood and was related to Attention Seeking. I felt like the article was all over the place.