User:Whit873M/Lamb-Shaffer syndrome/JasmineBriggins Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Whit873M)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Creating User:Whit873M/Lamb-Shaffer syndrome/JasmineBriggins Peer Review - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lamb-Shaffer syndrome - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I would suggest starting with the article's lead that way the article will flow more logically. With you not currently having the article's lead section drafted it is difficult to assess whether the content you're providing is concise with the topic, by starting with the diagnosis it is a bit confusing about what the content is based on. Also, references might include secondary sources such as peer reviewed journals from the uab database, books, journals etc... You seem to have a few grammatical errors that can easily be addressed. this article can be improved by providing the proper adjustments to start, begin drafting the article's lead and this will perhaps provide more of a logical flow to the article you've chosen.