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Being bold is Important

Employment Discrimination Article -The introduction paragraph is very wordy. It defines around three different terms in one paragraph making it very hard to read and understand. -The wording of the definition is too technical.Unless someone has a lot of knowledge about employment discrimination, it is very hard to understand what exactly it is. -The evidence portion could be formatted differently. It it a big block of words making it very hard to see where information starts and stops. -Evidence could use a better introduction and not just jump right into things -Make it know when the new evidence starts, such as a clear difference between different court cases and different experiments - Try to find more current data, experiments, and court cases -Add more explanation about nom-neoclassical and neoclassical approach -Too many words not enough content -This article has a very neutral viewpoint -The article is very wordy -Condense it to only the important information Whytekendra (talk) 22:26, 15 February 2018 (UTC)