User:WikiUser481/Glow & Lovely/Khascall Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:WikiUser481


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:WikiUser481/Glow_%2526_Lovely
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Glow & Lovely
 * Glow & Lovely

Lead
The lead is unchanged so far. I think your efforts are so far around the formula (which is already in the lead) and to expand the coverage of the controversy around the product. I think you probably want to work something into the lead to refer to your expansions.

Content
I think you've selected relevant areas to expand, although it might be worth thinking up at least one more subject area to include so that you can reach our target of improving the article by a full quality class. Google Scholar might be a good source for you. I also see some news items about health concerns and national bans. If you add health-related information, make sure you follow the strict sourcing guidelines for health claims (sources like PubMed are a good call -- I'm thinking of things like https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC8072511/ -- and you might also use the sources that pubmed articles link to).

Tone and Balance
It's a little bit challenging to write neutrally about a product when so much information about it tends to be critical. Keep on citing everything as you go.

Sources and References
I see some good progress here; keep working.

Organization
I think it would make sense to make a revision pass on the organizational structure. Right now I see the controversy spread into four sections (advertisement, criticism, rebranding, president of the company's response). Issues and criticism seem like the same thing, but the criticism section also includes the response from the company (was that before or after the ad suspension and rebranding?), and I don't know if the president needs her own section, the rebranding and the public statement both seem like they belong in the same section?

Images and Media
I'm not sure what photos would make sense beyond the product image (which we'll add back in when we make your changes live).

Overall impressions
In general, this is great progress. Keep working!