User:Wikieditor1685/Valley of the Queens/BlueCat976 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wikieditor1685


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Wikieditor1685/Valley of the Queens - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Valley of the Queens - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The first few sentences should probably have some citations

Its better to cite everything than risk not citing something that needs it – you should probably also have a citation for the last paragraphs sentences

Add a timeline in the intro that reflects the later sections

Valley of the Three Pits – what is it? All of these should probably be identified and defined, and if wiki pages exist for them link them

Again, make sure to cite EVERYTHING that isn’t an original thought. I can see that you added a lot already which is fantastic

“The Valley of the Queens was no longer a royal burial site after the close of the 20th Dynasty” for sure cite this and the other things in the paragraph. Honestly, don’t forget you could use our textbook, or at least the citations in the textbook

For your references list – don't list the same source several times, just reuse the same citation. What I did which I think helps with clutter is cite each one independently via a page number then have the main one below

Example:

References being: ^ Agnew pp1-2

Full citation: Agnew and Demas. "Valley of the Queens Assessment Report Volume 2: Assessment of of 18th, 19th, and 20th Dynasty Tombs". Conservation Perspectives 32.2. 2017.

Or, just have the main citation and cite it several times. Also, they need to have links if possible, and if they are a print book it needs to say so.