User:Wikientry01/Rice water/Shmoneyboo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wikientry01


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wikientry01/Rice_water?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rice water

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * You appear to properly cite and reference your sources which is good!
 * My main word of advice would be that the current tone of your article does not seem neutral. From my point of view, I feel as though I am being persuaded into wanting to use rice water, especially when reading how people are "wasting" rice water, etc. In order to improve what you have written, I would suggest changing some of your wording so that it seems less opinionated, while still detailing the benefits of using rice water.
 * Your lead is titled benefits of rice water as opposed to giving a brief introduction to the article. This may be an error, but if not I would suggest fixing this.
 * Your lead is titled benefits of rice water as opposed to giving a brief introduction to the article. This may be an error, but if not I would suggest fixing this.
 * Your lead is titled benefits of rice water as opposed to giving a brief introduction to the article. This may be an error, but if not I would suggest fixing this.