User:Wikipelli/SpiritReview


 * The lead is fairly small, you may want to put a few more details about its origins and history there. The lead does not have to be cited, but you should probably cite the quote in the lead.
 * Some of the quotes don't seem to line up with the guideline for quotation marks at MOS:PUNCT.


 * Need help with this from a better editor than me!! :)


 * "who had been a patient at the sanitarium, but was healed by a Christian Science faith healer, Mrs. Elizabeth K. Gregory." Maybe qualify this to some extent so it doesn't seem like were claiming there was a miracle healing.


 * *" a sanitorium of his own and hired Beilhart on as an associate." Do we need "on" here?


 * 'hired on' is, i guess a colloquial expression but, as you say, unnecessary here, particularly because I'd split it...


 * *In the third paragraph of the Founder section you use "religion" four times in three sentences, maybe use another word for variation?
 * changed... I'd like to know what you think


 * *"Beilhart rejected materialism" Just to double check, is that the right target of the link? Or did you mean to link to Economic materialism?
 * good catch... fixed


 * "the fear of losing love caused much of the disease in people." Maybe rephrase this part, it reads a bit oddly to me.


 * "following your conscience; take responsibility for actions — and develop an awareness of the consequences of your actions on others;" Is there a way to rewrite this without the use of "your"?


 * "As the leader, it is assumed" maybe note who assumed this?


 * "other, more politically or religion oriented, groups." Maybe note "such as"


 * Check the dashes for compliance with MOS:DASH.


 * There are a few small paragraphs in one section, can you combine them a bit?


 * Try to be consistent with how you write "free gift".


 * Does the fact that someone is the cousin of an Ohio State Librarian really merit inclusion here? It seems a bit trivial to me.


 * "The case eventually was dismissed by the Columbiana County courts on the somewhat equivocal grounds that it lacked jurisdiction." What do you think about moving this to the "Notes" section?
 * moved, but in doing so, I began to wonder if it's necessary at all... ?


 * Why did you italicize that one quote?
 * habit.. nothing more... :)


 * "it has been claimed, were" Maybe note who claimed this?


 * Should probably add a convert template when you mention acres.
 * I converted to 'ha' without a link. MOS suggest that 'common' units not be linked. Is 'ha' common?  I guess for those who would like acres converted to hectares in the first place it is common.  Thoughts?


 * "About a dozen members of the Spirit Fruit Society moved with Beilhart to Illinois, along with a few new members." Maybe qualify the "dozen members" Established members?


 * done


 * "covered by a recent housing development" Maybe say when instead of just using "recent".


 * As far as sources go: this andthis look like self-published sources to me. Now, perWP:WIAGA that is ok as long as they are not backing up claims that are likely to be question. Based on my brief check they seem to be ok. I'd prefer if you tried to minimize the use of them though.
 * For the Murphy book I noticed that you didn't cite page numbers, would it be possible for you to do that? Or page ranges (say, for a chapter) at least?
 * try be be consistent with publisher locations.