User:WildKaveMan/Max Gruenberg/Manes-notatis Peer Review

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WildKaveMan


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 * User:WildKaveMan/Max Gruenberg


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 * Max Gruenberg

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
It looks like the lead hasn't been updated from the original article. The first sentence could benefit from some restructuring to be more clear. It looks like Gruenberg served during two distinct time frames, and the lead should be rearranged in a chronological order. The exact date of Richard Foster's death and Gruenberg becoming the senior member of the House of Representatives might not be important enough to include in the lead section. Since the article addresses Gruenberg's military career, the lead section might incorporate at least a brief mention of his military service to reflect the basic outline of the article.

Content
The content of the article is relevant and up to date. After taking a quick look at the sources, I have a better understanding of Gruenberg. His education (Stanford University of Law School of UCLA) should be included (with links to the Wikipedia pages for both), and his clerkship with Alaska Supreme Court Justice Roger Conner. The Wikipedia article for the Alaska Supreme Court and Justice Conner could be linked here.

It would also be nice to see more information about the legislative bills that Gruenberg drafted and passed.

Tone and Balance
The tone is informative and does not try to persuade the reader. The content is neutral and doesn't take a specific viewpoint.

Sources and References
Source number 10 takes me to a page saying that no active session is assigned to me. The rest of the sources look reliable.

Organization
The Legislative Bills section might be easier to read in a table format instead of a list.

In the paragraph about Gruenberg's political career, Ted Stevens' name is missing an 's' at the end.

The order of the article is good. The sections are clear and logical.

Images and Media
There are no images or media included in the article. In the "Political Career" section, you could include a picture of the Alaska Capitol building.