User:Wilktyl/Open government/ElainaM2456 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User: Wilktyl


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wilktyl/Open_government?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Open government

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I thought you had a great first draft for your article. I think you lead into each new topic very well and also provide more relevant specific details that include an international perspective. In regard to the class rubric, I think you follow it well by adding in new sections that aren't just repeats of previous information, and I can tell you have made a substantial contribution to the article. I didn't see any bias either and I thought your tone of writing was appropriate as well. You wrote about key concepts we learned in class and I thought the accountability section was something that fit in very well this this article. I think that it may make more sense in your final draft to put that section below the transparency section. I don't know if that what you were planning on doing since you didn't edit the whole transparency section, but I think it may flow better since you talk about transparency within the accountability section you made. Lastly, I thought your citations were done well, and I really like how you linked in other articles within your sections that was not something I thought to add into mine but I thought it made your section look really put together.