User:Will590/Fanaticism/DkendraS Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Will590


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Will590/Fanaticism


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Fanaticism

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Will! I looked over your article and while it's got a lot of great content a few things could use clearing up. I think it would be a good idea to clarify your references/bibliography section, it looked like you were working off of only one source and I think it would be better to use several so as not to rely too heavily on any single resource. I was also relatively confused at first glance as to what contributions were yours - I'm assuming that your original writing was down at the end of the article, in which case your research is fascinating but I was relatively confused as to how your contributions will fit into the current article. Aside from that your grammar needs a bit of cleaning up, but things are otherwise looking good! DkendraS (talk) 22:21, 28 February 2021 (UTC) Kendra