User:Williabd/Phobia/Agreeves Peer Review

General info
Williabd
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Phobia 2

Evaluate the drafted changes
To begin, I think the article chosen was a great selection with extensive information and a vast area of opportunity to contribute more information. With the many subsections, it seems as if you can choose a few areas that you feel most confident about to work on, which I think is a great strategy for this assignment. Additionally, I think your contributions thus far have shown a more extensive picture of the treatment options available, rather than simply the statement about virtual reality that you crossed through to replace with your new sentence structure. The resources you are referencing for your information are recent and relevant to the topic, which is an important component of the article adaptation. Overall, I would love to see more of your work being added to the draft, as I feel so far it has been kept short and to the point. Great work so far; keep adding information!