User:Williabd/Phobia/Mewallac Peer Review

General info
Williabd
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Williabd/Phobia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Phobia

Evaluate the drafted changes
The information about how to treat phobias is written really well. I like that you listed out the behavioral interventions that could be done and mention that there are pharmacological methods to assist with phobias as well. My only critique is that the first sentence has a lot of filler words. If you were writing an introduction section for a research paper, this would be great, but this is meant for the general public to be able to read and understand. The information in that sentence is really good, but it needs to be condensed down.