User:WillieBean10/Music and emotion/Nerdman4244 Peer Review

Lead:
On my read-through of the lead, I felt that its did keep reiterating the topic sentence; " Research into music and emotion seeks to understand the psychological relationship between human affect and music. The field, a branch of music psychologyCovers numerous areas of study, "I think this could be simplified. beyond this, the lead looks pretty good It is concise, and covers the article's contents. The second section I feel could be expanded upon and not just list the sections.

My only suggestion for my peer would be to expand that last section to give a better cover of all the sections and also touch upon the section about the negative effects of music.

Content:
In my review of the added content, I found that the writer was able to expand off of the original author's section in "lyrics and emotion". The content added comes from up-to-date sources. The first paragraph is a nice expansion of the original content, covering the topic of lyrics specifically. for me, the second paragraph seems a little out of place the contents do not focus on the actual effect of lyrics but instead go in the direction of music in general and its effect on socializing. I like this addition but I feel it could be in a different section that covers music's relation with sociology.

Tone/balance:
My peer's addition to this article holds its neutrality pretty well. I just worry about phrases like, " It is obvious ", they just create a sense of opinion in me.

References:
the references used are very good. they cover the topic very well and match up on information. both are thorough. on the topic and are backed up with sources. in my search for any sources i didn't find much that wasn't similiar in nature or that briefly touched upon added content.

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