User:Willjco02/United Airlines circular economy initiatives/Catherine.a13 Peer Review

General info
Willjco02
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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Noteworthy topics:

- cool overall topic and I like the different categories! You get a good glimpse of every aspect

- The SAF Initiatives section is well-written! --> see things to consider

- Carbon capture section is really thorough! Nice job --> see grammar/details

- Aircraft Modernization section was great!!

Things to consider:

- I know your lead is just a draft, but just have a very brief intro paragraph and then you can go into the body of the Wiki page (just to help organization and flow)

- the second and third references have some sort of error message, might want to double check that

- You didn't really explain what a circular economy was. Maybe try to be a bit more clear or at least hyperlink it to another article.

- add references to the SAF initiatives section, don't want you to get flagged for plagiarism

Overall impressions:

- This is super well-written and a nice length!

- My notes are pretty minor, good job on being thorough --> You pretty much answered every question I had while I read through it

- Good citations on the last section!

More questions to potentially answer:

- the last sentence of the third paragraph in the first section is a bit ambiguous. What kind of "significant difference" are you talking about? That kind of seems up to interpretation, which might not be the best for a Wiki article.

- second section: "Circular economy has potential to reshape..." -- anything regarding potential implies a potential opinion. Is there anything you can directly reference here?

- Could you explain the end-of-life cycle/its management? It seemed unclear.

Grammar/details:

- "It is mainly focusing on three components of aviation: aircrafts, flights and aerodromes." -- Oxford comma, but I guess that's optional

- Just make sure to link everything before publishing instead of listing it in body of article, but that's minor!

- Eco Skies Alliance Program -- some of it is in italics, not sure why? Make sure to site this section correctly as well

- Nothing here is necessarily cited. Might be a good idea to hyperlink to other wikipedia pages (e.g., Svante, Scott Kirby, etc.)