User:Willjco02/United Airlines circular economy initiatives/Mjgirard10 Peer Review

General info
Willjco02
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Willjco02/United Airlines circular economy initiatives
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Lead:

 * Remove the first part of your organization of the article
 * Create a lead that includes
 * an introduction sentence
 * brief description of main points in article
 * This definitely needs an intro because I don't really know what to expect as I'm going in to the first section. As I am reading through I think laying out what you will talk about and in what order would be really helpful.

Content/Organization:


 * Remove names next to section titles.
 * I think reordering the sections would help the reader understand the points you are trying to make better.
 * I also think it would be helpful to define some words like circular economy. You said it has the potential to reshape the whole supply chain but I don't even know what it is so it doesn't seem significant.
 * The SAF section is good, however there is a lot of info in there that needs to be cited.
 * Most sections reference United Airlines which goes back to the topic, however the Circular Economy section does not, and i think that is throwing off the flow of the article a bit.
 * The Eco-Skies sections is really well done. I think other sections can mirror this format and it will help the overall flow of the article
 * You should all refer to united airlines as the same- either the whole thing or just United. (I think the whole thing is the best.)

Tone and Balance:


 * Good neutral tone, There was no bias that I noticed.
 * I think a counter example could be quite useful. This focuses on United Airlines which is good, but a comparison between United to another large airline company could give this article another dimension and show how United is doing in comparison to the market. This could also make the article sounds even more neutral if you give things that United needs to work on compared to other companies, and what they are doing successfully.

Sources and References:


 * In the application of Circular economy section, remove the links at the bottom of the section and insert a footnote with the link instead.
 * All sections but the first and last need citations added.
 * Eco-skies alliance - links in paragraphs distract, put it in as a footnote

Overall impression:


 * Overall I think this is a great topic. I think the organization needs some work but the content is all there. ( Dont forget to add citations in all articles). I was very pleased with the amount of information and the sections it was broken in too, but I think the group should work together to make the sections more consistent with one another.