User:Willysandals/Skateparks in Virginia/Sploosh95 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Willysandals


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Willysandals/Skateparks_in_Virginia?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Skateparks in Virginia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I know that you do not currently have anything in your sandbox as I write this, but I hope that you can take this as some suggestions.

I would like to start by mentioning that this is a very interesting article to read, even with the little bit that is there right now. I am a fan of skateparks, though I do not partake in the activity myself. It was interesting to see how many there really are in Virginia alone, though I do believe some things could you a little reorganizing and more information.

First, I would love to see more description on what a “premier” skate park is. It is one of the things that open the article, but there is no information in regard to what that means. I see that there is a link that can take you to where that source was found and possibly find the information there, but it would be very convenient to the readers if that information was at least summarized within the article. An on the topic of the opening of the article, I believe the information there could be organized a bit better.

I suggest maybe separating the information with the parks, skaters, and competitions. Put the park information first because that is what the title indicates as the important aspect in the entire thing. Including the information about all the indoor and outdoor parks would be perfect here. They could even be separated into two categories or inside and outside with little bits of history for each of them- or at least for those that have one. For all the other, I think a date of establishment would be enough.

And then maybe you can add some photos of skate parks that are not shown in the chart.

Peer Review
There has been some revisions made from the original article that I like as a reader. The rewrite of the lead has made the opening information a lot clearer and flowing. The information is presented in a neutral and informative way that did manage to peak my interest on the topic. I do think there are a few small errors like "The city of Richmond is great example of this". There should be an "a" put between "is great". Other than that, I hope to see more credits and references cited within the opening to show were this information is from. I do see that there is one reference listed in your reference area, but remember to put the citations into the article as well. I think that would help with the information given about the DIY skate parks, since it seems, to me, to be the most fleshed out portion of your revision.

I do like the chart that exists within your article, though I do hope you add more information like the ones I mentioned in my suggestions above. Things like more history aspects such as a date the parts were established and shut down, if they were closed. More images of some of the most well-known parks might be nice to add some more visual appeal to the content. Maybe this information and images can be added in another section below the graph. I believe it will help make the article feel more complete, especially once more information on events and competitions are added to what is already in the original article. Seeing more connections of skaters that have come from this scene in Virginia might draw more appeal as well.

I understand that this is still all a work in progress, but I do hope that this helps narrow down the list of things that you have to add in a way that can be done in a smoother way. I think this piece has a lot going for it and if you add those few suggested details, the article will be much better off.